Friday, March 2, 2012

Trifextra: Week Six

Week 16 saw a total of 55 responses to our chosen word. There were plenty of puns made in the comments sections and in your post introductions about the wretched prompt, but the responses we got were anything but wretched. Again, we welcomed many first-timers to the challenge and we love how quickly our regulars made their way around the different blogs, reading, commenting and encouraging. If it is your first time joining up, please click on the 'Meet Your Fellow Trifectans' tab to find out more about the other writers and also take a second to introduce yourself to the community.

We also saw a triumphant return, after a considerable hiatus, of our student writers. Fourteen of them contributed this week; some of the writing made us wonder if a separate link-up was really necessary. Make sure you check them out and support what they're doing.

Our winner this week is once again Amanda from Last Mom on Earth. Her story, White Rabbit was once again a brilliant example of her unique talent:
I climbed out of my window before dawn. My mom was drunk, dressed in a flowing white nightdress that spilled around her on the floor like foam in a stormy sea. She rustled as I stepped over her body and laughed. It was a little, tittering sound that came from the land of her dreams. She was always dreaming. 
My father had money and a family who lived near the lake, on the sound. I spent my summers there, as a kid. My mother used to lay on a blanket while I waded in the shallows, searching for bullfrogs. She wore round sunglasses that covered most of her face. She painted her lips red and tied a scarf in her hair.

She was married once before, in New York City. She kept a box full of his pictures on the top shelf of her closet. Sometimes I woke up at night and found her crouched under the bare bulb, sorting through them, clutching them to her breast. There was a picture of her in a white dress that barely reached halfway down her thighs. She was smiling and the wind was blowing her veil. 
I always left early for school. I couldn't stand the sight of her in the morning sunlight. I wanted orange juice and nagging. I wanted her to stand at the sink, smoking a cigarette and asking if I had my homework. She used to do those things. She used to flick on the light in my bedroom and say, "I'm not going to tell you again!"
I walked in the gutter. It would rain later in the day. The air was heavy and soft against the skin of my arms. I found a rabbit with white fur crumpled against the curb. The wretched thing was missing a leg. I turned it over with the tip of a stick. Its mouth was frozen in a tiny smile. Its teeth protruded over a mangled little lip.
In second place is Letmestartbysaying's The Sudden Beast, a vivid description of the sudden and debilitating onslaught of a migraine headache. Scriptor Obscura takes third place again this week with Catholic. In only 33 words, she highlights the horrors of the Holocaust and the effect it had even on those who survived.

And so to our weekend prompt. We've often said that we love how each of you responds so differently to our prompts. This week, you're all starting with the same 5 words and your task is to turn it in to your own story in only 33 words. The 5 we have given you are NOT to be counted in the 33 words.


For this weekend's challenge, we are once again asking you guys to choose the winner. You can vote using a link that will appear beside each thumbnail at the close of the contest.  Linkz will remain open after the close of the contest to allow for voting.  Submissions received after 8 pm EST on Sunday evening, however, will be deleted by admin.  You will only have the 12 hours following the close of the contest to vote.  Due to the restrictions of the linking service, you may not vote for a link from the same computer where it was submitted.  We hope you believe in your work enough to find another device to vote from, and we are sorry for the inconvenience.

Complete the following story in exactly 33 words:

The phone rang at 4am.

41 comments:

  1. I liked those three pieces so much. Kim aka Let Me Start's was really creative and the otehr two were well written and heartbreaking.

    My phone's ringing but it's 9am.

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  2. Great choices! Last Mom always blows me away.

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  3. Crap. I have to edit. Apparently I skimmed rather than read and included the first five in my 33. :)

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  4. Congratulations to Amanda & Scriptor, both were so rich.

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  5. QUESTIONS:

    1. I have commented on all 27 entries at this point (not including my own, of course), and yet I don't see my comments showing on even half the posts...even when it didn't say they were being moderated. So...anyone know what that would be? Do my comments just never show up for some of you? Or maybe they're turned into spam?

    2. Any chance those of you who use Captcha could turn it off for these? Some are so tough to read, I spend more time trying to figure these out than reading the pieces themselves.

    3. Finally (I know, really, how ANNOYING am I today?!), any chance those of you who don't have the "NAME/URL" option when commenting, could please add it? Thank you!

    I swear, I'm done now. ;)

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    1. Kim, don't hold back, tell us how you really feel! I share your frustration. Captcha, in particular, because the images have gotten so fuzzy - I thought my eyes were going bad until someone else complained! Now to take a look at your blog after commenting here... peace, and thanks for not making me the only ranter on these issues! (wink) Amy

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    2. First, huge props, Kim, for commenting on all the posts so quickly! I can't really help you with question one, but I do have sympathy with questions 2 and 3. Captcha can make things tricky when commenting, especially on so many pieces. Also, having the name/url option enabled certainly makes commenting easier.

      Thoughts from the rest of you?

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    3. I often skip commenting on blogs with Captcha - why make me skip through hoops? It never made any difference to my level of spam when I used to use it. I get now more now.

      I recently installed DISQUS for comments -is that okay. It allows a variety of sign in options and I think the name/URL too. If anyone has issues - shahwharton at gmail dot com. :)

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    4. Kim, I agree esp with the captcha and name/url parts of your questions. And, some folks are using some sort of sign in option - I can't/won't do those because I frankly sign in to too many things as it is.

      Love all the writers - support them all - wish I could tell more how I feel about their writing. :)

      My blog comments are wide open to anyone. Sometimes the comments end up in my spam folder, but I ferret them out and approve them (hopefully) in a timely manner.

      You braveheart, you. :)

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    5. Kim - yes, your comment ended up in my spam (wordpress).

      I recovered it when I saw it there.

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    6. Down with captcha. Also, on blogger, captcha often causes the system to reject non Google IDs. Grrr.

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    7. Seconded! All my blogs a blogger - glad I don't use catchy then. :)

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    8. Thanks so much, everyone, for letting me know it's not just me. :)

      I want to read & comment on everyone's work, but it ends up taking twice the time when I need to deal with all the Captcha/log-in loopholes, and to see that sometimes, even after all of that, my comment just disappears? Frustrating.

      Sharp Little Pencil: I recently got glasses again, and still they're fuzzy. Ugh!
      Shah: I usually don't have issues with DISQUS, I think I just use my Twitter login, since it's the shortest. ;)
      barbar: I, too, go through my Spam daily just to see if anyone's comment has slipped in there. If someone took the time? I want to recognize it.
      guapola: Thanks for digging me out of your Wordpress Spam! I was on the free Wordpress & am now self-hosting, so I think sometimes my comments get posted via Wordpress, but then tossed into spam. Ugh.
      Jester: This is what I suspected...

      Thanks everyone for your feedback, and for Trifecta for not finding my questions too terribly interruptive! :)

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    9. I love this discussion. I do not love Captcha. :-)

      -Lisa

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    10. I really like the discus thing, just haven't had a second to investigate. I should really look at my blog from another computer ... just to see what it is like because I don't know. And it is lovely to get comments.

      I want to add my own 2 bits to the captcha thing. I have a friend with a disability who writes and presents on accessibility issues. Using captcha automatically excludes her and many from the conversation because every keystroke costs her dearly, in time and effort. I haven't noticed any difference with captcha turned off ... though I believe I am pretty small potatoes.

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    11. I wish there was a way to tell I'm going to have to jump through the captcha hoop *before* I read the post and type the comment. Also, I 100% support the request to let me log in with Name/URL.

      At one time I was on blogspot, and then on free wordpress - so I can use those to log in and post comments, but they link back to "dead" blogs. I would have posted twice as many comments this week but eventually I just got frustrated and worn out from the effort! Sorry to those I skipped.... {endrant}

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  6. I BLEW IT. Didn't catch the part of the prompt that says "complete the following story." I simply used that line within the poem, thinking it would complete the story in the middle. Thought it would make it unique. DRAT! Manic depression wins again, wink. Amy Barlow Liberatore (Sharp Little Pencil)

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    1. Amy, I don't think you blew it. You added a few sentences before it and a few sentences after it. In other words, you completed the story.

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  7. I, too, gave myself extra work. I should have gone to source rather than picking up what I thought was the theme from another blog. As it is, I wrote one 33-word effort based on his heading! Then rectified ...

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  8. :) It's a test to see if we read directions. :)

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  9. I have read some of entries (love them all) but assume that I am unable to vote because I don't contribute. I appreciate that's probsably the purpose but I would like to be able to vote and suspect there are other 'outsiders' like me who would do so if they could.

    Sharp Littlew Pencil may have 'blown it' but I loved her entry.

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    1. To the best of my knowledge, anyone can vote?

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    2. Yep, voting begins when the challenge closes at 9 pm EST on Sunday evening. You will then have 12 hours to vote. Voting is restricted to one vote per IP address and due to the restrictions of the linking service, you may not vote for a link from the same computer where it was submitted.

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  10. Lisa, David, do you know trifecta anonymous captchas the hell out of us when we try to comment?

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    1. Hi, Jester. No, I did not know that! I've just gone in and changed the settings so hopefully it should be fine now. Thanks for the heads up. - David

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    2. David - I still had to work around captcha in the trifecta anonymous. :(

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    3. It should (really) be fine now. Let us know.

      -Lisa

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    4. MUCH MOR BETTAH!!! All good now.

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    5. Yay! Thanks so much. I meant to ask when the topic came up in twitter, but the small brain failed to hold onto the idea for any length of time when I noticed it after the fact.

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  11. I'm new and just submitted my first entry. So, what's the prize here?

    Please say Rice-a-Roni, please say Rice-a-Roni, please say Rice-a-Roni .... fingers crossed!

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    1. Welcome to the challenge! Alas, we're right out of Rice-a-Roni. We'll see if we can sort something out for next week...

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  12. And I just submitted entry number two, a polar opposite in tone of my first.

    I will try to pick up the pieces of my life concerning the Rice-a-Roni and move on with my life. Deep breaths ....

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    1. Expect a period of grieving. It's normal. Winners do get a funky winner's badge. It's not processed rice food, but. . .

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  13. Did my 1st one too....lets see what happens!

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  14. Not everything CAN be processed rice food actually. Sigh ...

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  15. Congrats to the winners from my side & I wonder one day it comes when I will also produce a quality story and win the competition really...

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